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The few, they trudged across that vast expanse. From the mountain peaks their journey ahead seemed disgusting.
No, daunting, that’s the word. Their journey seemed daunting.
Daunting? Really, isn’t that a bit cliche?
The journey ahead was dangerous or daunting. What if they journey ahead was silly? What if it would be mostly smooth but somewhat annoying? Let me decide if it will be daunting and tell me what it was. Enough preamble.
I suppose our opinions differ.
I’m in outer space and you’re trying on the 8.5 size shoe at JC Penny because the 8 was just a little bit too tight in the toes. Yeah, I suppose we differ.
Ok, the few continued their journey ahead with no idea what was in store for them.
Who is that for?
“…no idea what was in store for them.” Is that for me, the reader? Are you smashing me in the nose with the obvious? Why would they know what was in store for them?
It’s just a story.
Well tell it better.
Suddenly a ravenous beast roared across the plain.
So no they’re on a plane?
No across the expansive plain.
And so the journey started and suddenly a beast roars? Excuse me, a ravenous beast.
I have no frame of reference. I don’t know who to root for, I mean you make the “beast” sound scary but it could be someones dog. I don’t know who the few travellers are and why they are where they are.
I’m going to tell you.
yes but at this point I’ve read enough.
I shall continue anyway.
I’ve closed the book, so have at it.